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When I look at today’s politicians, I feel ashamed,
That everybody but themselves are to be blamed.
If I could change the world, I would stop this game,
And around them, of love and hope, build a frame,
To stop all the lies and decieves,
So it wont fear and discourage archieve,
In people who in their words believe,
So they will only trust and truth conceive.

Lies of Today
Homework for school.
The theme was "If I could change the world", therefore inspired by Jojo White.

Not this poem though.
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insanityassassin Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2005
you have typos :P its pretty good though
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Mathy Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2005
Dammit!! XD
Where!? :D
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insanityassassin Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2005
"deceives" is a verb... you used it as a noun. And you spelt it wrong! In English the rule is "i before e, except after c". And you wrote "decieves"

and I take it "archieve" is meant to be "achieve"
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Mathy Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2005
Whoops, thought I fixed the "ie" mistakes XD
Well, darn, but no ones perfect :D
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insanityassassin Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2005
I AM!!!!!!!


*runs away laughing manically*
*ambulance rushes after her*
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